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You cut beer cakes over my wrists, and
I wince - enchanted eyes, you watch my
artwork and it burns you, I hope that it
turns you away. This is a game.
I wonder why I am so childlike, ribbon-dancing
around your soap bubble and glass scar heart.
I paint trees in foam and write suicide notes
three days early. How could I expect success unless
I redirect your veins to you hands [just like mine]
and fight fire with fire and sin with sin?
People are brittle, but they always win.
Carpe Diem.




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Your poem definitely exudes some surrealism. I find it quite odd-sounding, but that is indeed the nature of surrealist work. I'm not sure what else exactly to say about it. I like it though. :)
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I have lived through much, and now I think I have found what is needed for happiness. A quiet secluded life in the country, with the possibility of being useful to people to whom it is easy to do good... then rest, nature, books, music, love for one's neighbor - such is my idea of happiness.
— Leo Tolstoy