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[FYI I deleted the text b/c parents may know about my YWS now. Shame, but they're real strict and conservative sometimes. They don't like sexual allusions and they sure as hell don't care for Rammstein.]
Last edited by Teufelshund on Wed May 20, 2009 6:21 am, edited 4 times in total.




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I don't critique poetry much but I saw 'rammstein' :-D I don't think I've heard the song mentioned, the only albums I have are Mutter and the album with Du Has in it (I forget what its called...) They're pretty good! I like the song 'klavir' (sp?)

But, anyway! I liked this, gasoline and fire brings such a good mental image, I can literally smell the gasoline as I read this.

No bitter coffee to awake me from my mourning coma
I really liked this line and the play on mourning/morning. Seemed in true rammstein spirit; a play on words!

I liked it :-D
“It's necessary to have wished for death in order to know how good it is to live.”
― Alexandre Dumas, The Count of Monte Cristo




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I like the play on the words morning/mourning as well. Its the thing I spotted that I liked :)
Good work! Flowed well and I have nothing critical to say :)
Well done. VG for you!!! lexy x
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