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The midnight sky !

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A chance to dream
A chance to fly
And dance around the midnight sky,
A chance to meet friends old and new
And party 'til the night is through.

The fairie queen sits in her throne
A dainty crown apon her head,
She watches as her friends pass by
And float arond the midnight sky

A chance to sleep
A chance to lie
As morning takes the midnight sky,
A chance to rest and restore power
As daylight wakes each dainty flower.




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Well, for a first poem, this isn't too bad. It's a sweet, simple rhyming poem that flows pretty well. You could definitely use a little more punctuation, though.

One spelling note: "apon" should be "upon". And "arond" should be "around".

If you keep writing and reading, you'll definitely get better. Keep it up! :mrgreen:
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Congratualations on writing your very first poem and a modest one too! before you know it, you won't be able to drink water before you scribble a couple of verses.

anyway, i liked this poem it sounds like a sing-song nursery rhyme which is really sweet and very imaginative. i enoyed the second stanza.
Calvin : You can't just turn on creativity like a faucet. You have to be in the right mood.
Hobbes : What mood is that?
Calvin : Last-minute panic.



I say Wolf, for all wolves are not of the same sort; there is one kind with an amenable disposition – neither noisy, nor hateful, nor angry, but tame, obliging and gentle, following the young maids in the streets, even into their homes. Alas! Who does not know that these gentle wolves are of all such creatures the most dangerous!
— Charles Perrault