Sure looks interesting, but it's a little hard to find and read on Live Journal. I'm sure that if you pasted it into a thread and posted it in the Literary Forums you would get more comments and critiques - I would most certainly look at it in detail for you if that was the case.
You'd be astonished at the intimate stories, hidden struggles, and heartfelt dreams that people are willing to reveal if only they find someone who'll truly listen. — Arcticus
