Victoria

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Angels-Symphony
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Tue Nov 01, 2011 5:00 am
Angels-Symphony says... · Tue Nov 01, 2011 5:00 am
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You cannot dream yourself into a character; you must hammer and forge yourself into one.

The writer, when he is also an artist, is someone who admits what others don't dare reveal.
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Tue Nov 01, 2011 5:26 am
Lava says... · Tue Nov 01, 2011 5:26 am
I like the idea; I don't have time for a thorough review though. Sorry.

Uncertainty and distress carve her eyes, a rich shade of dark brown
This caught me off guard. I mean, I dunno, it sounds a bit clunky? Probably because of the 'rich shade f brown'. It may sound nicer if scrapped.

Sorry it's sooo short.
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