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This is awesome! Really, I love it! I can’t wait to read more and see where you’re going to go with this. Your writing is beautiful; I wish I could ...

I agree with tabithalillian completely. No matter how good your plot is, if your characters are flat they’re gonna bring the story down too. Your MC needs to show some ...

Of Loss and Love: chapter six Love is a friend, a fire, a heaven, a hell, where pleasure, pain, and sad repentance dwell [Richard Barnfield] “Ah, Lady Millicent...” I looked ...

I think you need to project a little more emotion in the dialogue through some of your characters. The conversations seem a bit boring, almost like a list; break it ...

This is absolutely brilliant! You write with such confidence it makes everything I read seem believable, the world your story is set in to your characters, it’s as if I’m ...

I really like the way you narrate here. It's really cool and brings out a great personality to your MC. Good job!

Thanks guys, I really appreciate it!

This is really good and I like your dialogue! I'm gonna have to look up the first six chapters and then come back and give you a better review, lol. ...

Hey Cassie! Here’s my review, first I’ll start with the nit picks. The second sentence is missing something or maybe it’s just me. Maybe if you changed it to “I ...

Thank you!

Thank you! I've made some improvements

Thank you ofir! Brilliant points as always!

Firstly, I apologize for not reviewing your stories earlier, I've spent so much time trying to put together my own. I think Pretty Crazy is right, you need to give ...

Thank you!

Thank you!