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Personally I think you did well with portraying the emotions of your character, you said just about enough for us to get a glimpse of her feelings. Your plot was ...

You dreamt about dragons? Cool! I usually dream about weird stuff. Anyway here are my honest thoughts on this chapter. I loved your descriptions; you’ve really gone out of your ...

You’ve got some good reviews so far. I’m going to touch on a few things. Firstly it was brave of you to attempt this type of narration but I think ...

Hi, welcome to YWS! I think you’ve got a good story so far and a good introduction. I’m interested to see where this story will be going so good job! ...

I absolutely LOVE this! Your writing simply oozes with confidence and it makes brilliant reading. I love your characters and how you present them. Kim is such a refreshing character ...

thank you!

Of Loss and Love: chapter five Love is a friend, a fire, a heaven, a hell, where pleasure, pain, and sad repentance dwell [Richard Barnfield] One long month had passed ...

Thanks for reviewing my story, now it’s my turn! :D I like it, I really do. You set the beginning out really well because I want to read more. Everything ...

Hey there! Here are a few things I’ve come up with. Firstly, I think you mention the word “master” a few too many times in your first few sentences, take ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! Firstly, I think you need to work on your first sentence. Instead of saying: “When I walked home from middle school I would think it would ...

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Thanks for the advice. I'm finding the description really difficult so I'm not surprised a lot of people of picked up on it. Anyway I'll go through the chapters and ...

Great, lol! I was wondering why you seemed confused!