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Mother fuckers in the club--hand's up, hand's up Mother fuckers on the street--what's up, what's up Everybody in the world--let's go, let's go Party people--let's roll, let's roll now let ...

Lordgluzman has a point there a poetry such as this needs more words in it i felt like it ended at the same pointe it started (these where my favorite ...

IMAGERY--emerald grass swished in heavy wind As much as you can, shove it in. METAPHORE--the sun kissed the valley. This should be required in every poem. RHYTHM--La-la, la-la; la-la-la, la-la-la... ...

give a little more appreciation to people who help you loose your frustration when you get pissed off by someone just say fuck it, you won if you try to ...

as i was reading the story i noticed that it is really creative but there where lots of commas missing if you care about that or not----------also “I am dieing ...

i personaly thought that the poem was good- you got a point there about how the wind has been everywhere, and what it has seen-----------a good enique song------------ --------------awsome------

The night dissolves beneath me, I awake to the atmosphere of war, The house shaking, Beneath the rumble of the planes. Voices rise between my family,--------------------------------family--house Tears

Broken arms and broken bones is Nothing compared to a broken heart I’ve been trapped inside of my mind Till I saw a signnnnnn I’ve been hiding from everyone Can’t ...

dude this song was awsome-----these where my favorite lines (((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((So many pity lives))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) Being shot and stabbed by knifes Shouts and

no offense but this does not sound like a song- it's more of a poem for twilight there is basically no lyrics at all in this, it's a poem

nice-------very touching this was my favorite one dou (Verse 2) I miss you dear mommy Can you hear my voice? I’m standing here waiting To be your first choice NICE

interesting-----------interesting-------------interesting---------- this is a good one keep wirting stuff like this also i like the name of the song- it's really cool

i don't really know if this is rap or not- but if you would rap this for like a heavy metal beat i should say- then it would be really ...

-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------i besically made a part 2 to this song just names it (((Teenage love)))- so if an

My heart taken away Like the soul in my body just flying away And I, just flew into heaven Or is it you girl coming here with angels And I ...