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Hi velvet! This is a great poem. I think the structure of having just a few words, sometimes even only one, on a line and having it as a continuous ...

Hi! I am here to review your lovely story today :) The story here is very compelling and creates a lot of intrigue for me to keep reading! The narrator ...

Hi! I'm confused; this says Chapter Five, but I don't see a Chapter Four in the portfolio. Maybe you mislabelled it or missed one? Maybe I am missing something lol. ...

Hi PageDreamer! i'm back again for the next chapter. I see Tikaya already mentioned this again, but you really need to stick to new speech on a new line. It's ...

I have been intrigued by this project since I saw you log it with the writer's log because 'Digestive System' just made me think this was some sort of biology ...

Hi Creeper! Hope you are doing good today! In the small beachside town called “Moon’s Beach”, named for the rather mesmerizing way the moon glittered on the ocean, there was ...

oo I love this so far. I know you said it's for a visual novel, does that mean like a game? Since the character is 'player'? That's how I was ...

Hi Roro! Welcome to YWS and thank you for posting this charming piece. Firstly, it seems that you used AI to make the cover. It would be preferred if you ...

Hi Cora, welcome to YWS! Thank you for sharing your work today. This is a very short yet effective piece. Each sentence is given its own line for dramatic effect, ...

I have always wanted to review a very old work! For context I was two years old when this was posted. The lines are so short and compressed; you're really ...

It was her being a vampire that should have terrified them. I love how you had this as the end line of the introduction. You really sucked me in and ...

Hi! This is a great little excerpt. Do you plan to turn this into something longer, or keep it as is? It could definitely become a short story or even ...

Hello! Apologies, it has been a few days since I promised to do my next review. I read this late at night on my phone, and I was so captivated ...

This is a very short poem, and it still makes a huge impact. I think the last line, 'like a greedy witch,' is what makes this work. It's such a ...

This is a really heavy poem, and I can really feel the emotion shining through your words. I hope you are feeling okay now, and if not, hopefully you have ...