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Re: The Captain
Hey, Che here for a quick review! First of all, I loved how you were able to tell a story in such a short amount of words, complete with a ...
Apr 7, 2019 -
Re: Beautiful Things
Hey, Che here for a review :-) I'll start by pointing out some areas I think could do with a little improvement. She was fiddling with her necklace when the ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: The Green Forest
Hey, Che here for a quick review! Growing up in India, I was taught respecting animals. This would make more sense if you said "I was taught to respect animals" ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: The Mist That Falls at Night
Hey, Che here for a quick review! I'll first point out any grammatical errors or typos I see . The suicide that they found hidden in one of her many ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: The Black Teenager’s Journey
Hey there! Che here for a review I've been meaning to review this piece for a while as it's been in the Green Room for quite a while but for ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: Beginning
Hey, Che here for a review! I saw this buried in the green room and thought it deserved another review, so here I am. I will start with any grammatical ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: The one who took my pain away - a sonnet
Hey! Che here for a quick review! The first thing I will point out is that because this is a sonnet, I believe every line should have 10 syllables, am ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: It's Gray!!
Hey, Che here for a review! I will just start of with any grammatical errors I spot or anywhere I think you could have improved the story, along with corrections ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: The leaving of a Lover
Hey, Che here for a quick review :-) Firstly, the way you managed to get across pain and emotion into such a small amount of words amazes me. It's a ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: With the melting of the snow
Hey, Che here for a quick review! Firstly, the imagery in this poem was absolutely beautiful. It came across so strongly and I could really picture it in my mind ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: As time flies by
Hey, Che here for a quick review! First of all, I really agreed with the message you were getting at in this poem. It's a topic that I feel very ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: Off the High Horse
Hey, Che here for a quick review! I really liked the rhyming in this as it helped it flow, and the actually story in the poem made me chuckle :-) ...
Apr 6, 2019 -
Re: Can you feel it?
hey there. Just a quick review from me :-) I can tell that the poem is about something close to your heart as the emotion comes through very strongly. It ...
Apr 5, 2019 -
Re: Gleamwood - Chapter 1
Hey there! Che here for a review :-) I will start with any grammatical errors that I spotted, along with corrections and places where I think you could make a ...
Apr 5, 2019 -
Re: you started talking and i listened
Hey, Che here for a quick review! :-) Overall, I thought that this was a rather beautiful poem. The emotion and heartbreak you were able to portray was actually pretty ...
Apr 5, 2019