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no problem, and that's great that you're doing better! :-)

Thank you so much! And yes I've been meaning to put their thoughts in italics, I always forget when writing aha

Thank you so much! The reason the narration shifts a bit is because it was originally meant to all be Ian this time but I didn't like it changed it ...

thank you so much for the review! It really means a lot

Thank you so much! i will look into your suggestions!

Thank you so much! Your feedback is much appreciated :-)

Thank you so much! It means a lot, and thank you for correcting my mistake XD

Thank you so much for the review! It means a lot :-) As for 'twenty two going on forty,' i meant that she's twenty two, but she looks like she ...

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That's alright, I've actually changed the ending and carried on the story so that it makes more sense, I'll upload that sometime soon

Thank you so much! It was meant to be that her body was under the bed and this whole time she and ian had been ghosts, but I wasn't sure ...

Thank you so much!! This really means a lot

Thank you so much!! This means a a lot, really

thank you so much! This is really useful feedback, i really appreciate it

Thank you so much! This has really helped, since the things you pointed out are the things i struggle with most when it comes to poetry!