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Thank you for the review :-) I know what you mean about the syllables but I tried to make every line 13 syllables so had to add in some extra ...

Do you have any idea how i could rephrase it? I just don't want to make it even more confusing lol :-D

i just thought about the sentence that didn't make sense to you... It's saying her voice is calm as though this is just a normal, everyday conversation. Then the doctor ...

Ahhh thank you so much!! I really need to work on my sentence lengths I know!

If you read the poem as if there is a comma after the first line and the third, it makes sense, "never do you stop and think that the meat ...

I think that would have been "The langoliers" ? A mini series i think. But yeah not good at 8 years old!

what movie was it? I love Stephen King- his books are genius!

thank you so much :-) I see what you mean about the line and I will take that into account. It made sense when I wrote it, aha :-D

wow thank you so much! I will take what you said about the ending into account- I don't particularly like the last stanza either so I probably will delete it. ...

Poems with the most emotions are always the best ones :-)

thank you :-)

Thank you! My grammar is not the best. I only included the now because every line is 10 syllables

ah, I have the opposite, I always have to follow a strict rhyme scheme. To be honest, I don't really think it made that much of a difference to the ...

for some reason this didn't post as a review, even though I'm sure it's enough characters, sorry about that!

Hey! I really liked this poem. I thought that is flowed very well and had some really nice imagery! The rhyme scheme was a little inconsistent, for example in stanza ...