8.Hikari.21

I made a reconnaissance before looking upon the same zenith that I see everyday. I will not be discouraged by these human-made walls of sedimentary rocks. I will not capitulate ...

Initial thought: "Aww, how cute", then the darkness hit me and I was a little iffy about the overall picture. It looks like it's almost like part of a dream. ...

Of course, stories should have detail/descriptions, I agree with LavendarBlue, but it also depends on what you're going for in a story. If the dialogue is really important (which I ...

First thing and only thing: Second paragraph "Maybe you also feels ..." Feels should be without an 's'. Other than that I love the concept, because I also like writing ...

Yes, I agree with Nightlyowl. It was amazing up to the fourth stanza where it seemed to be a bit off beat from the beginning of the poem with the ...

Nice poem, but I found it a bit random. Walking past the skyscrapers which lead to the park, I understand that, but then you move on to: "As a child, ...

I liked the last one the best! The sillohette of the tree branches against the blue sky is very fascinating. Hehe... The second picture, the one of the sky, was ...

I'm jealous. You write really well when using the point of view of a six-year-old boy. I have to say that I loved this chapter. Perhaps most of the critiques ...

As Time Passes By Click, click, click, click... A girl switchs the radio switch repeatedly on and off. "An-to-ay-see-affi-Ah-ha-ha-ha..." The girl continues to play with the switch as she stares ...