8.Hikari.21

Of course, stories should have detail/descriptions, I agree with LavendarBlue, but it also depends on what you're going for in a story. If the dialogue is really important (which I ...

First thing and only thing: Second paragraph "Maybe you also feels ..." Feels should be without an 's'. Other than that I love the concept, because I also like writing ...

Nice poem, but I found it a bit random. Walking past the skyscrapers which lead to the park, I understand that, but then you move on to: "As a child, ...

I'm jealous. You write really well when using the point of view of a six-year-old boy. I have to say that I loved this chapter. Perhaps most of the critiques ...