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Hi TheThing! I'll be blunt here: I really don't get this. I mean, I understand what it's about, but isn't the idea a bit cliche? A bit overused? Just look ...

Hopefully someone will understand the underlying metaphor? Envy's bedroom walls aren't green aren't battlefield camouflage or an immaculate lawn. They aren't orange with downfall like a leaf preparing

Hi Kitrosemon13! Well, what Ace said ... I'll just fix a couple things up. Fill the room with my feelings ; I promise the darkness will cover all. You've ruined ...

Oh, my! I hope this isn't true. In any event, I'll go through and fix a few things in red ... Dear Mother, I have never had sex. I have ...

Hi Ladee, and welcome to the Young Writers' Society! First things first, I'm not sure this is a poem. It seems just like a little speech. I mean, there was ...

Hi VeraWinters! First of all, I'll go through and edit some things ... Asher was never meant to be a teacher He was far too open and too kind. He ...

Hi there, HorseradishCares! I like this, and I have just two comments: :idea: 1. Your line breaks are kind of random, making the flow pretty choppy. Try to think of ...

Hi there Timmi92, and welcome to t he Young Writers' Society! I'll just go through and fix some things ... just a hint, though: I might omit your first sentence ...

Hi MysticalBlood! Wow, you have talent. The second photo just pops off of the screen at me. I know that is an overused sentiment when it comes to drawing, but ...

Hi Meggwriting! I will go through and fix some mistakes first, and then give you an overall opinion ... The glory to behold the sight , Of a guardian angel ...

Before I even read this story, I must strongly recommend that you post a little note at the top of your story saying that you took the title of the ...

Hi Blackbird12! This poem is beautiful, and about such a unique topic! It took me until the fifth stanza to understand what the poem was about, though, so I had ...

Hi there Kyllorac! I like this poem very much, though I'm not sure I'd go so far as to call it that. I could see someone quoting the above stanzas ...

This poem is so poignant -- there is nothing I can say to criticize it, which is one of the greatest compliments you can get from me. I have always ...

I must say, I'm rather confused. Isn't it fun to "chase that glittering rainbow in the sky"? If "life is such a bore", how can it be "for the good ...