Abigail_W.

Haha Manpuddin, this is hilarious! First things first, welcome to the Young Writers' Society! I hope you like the reviews you have received here, and will venture to do some ...

Hiya Persephoneia! I like this! I'm not sure if I've mentioned this before, but welcome to the Young Writers Society! My one recommendation is that you change the fourth line ...

Hiya Retrodisco666! Well, I appreciate the point of this poem, though I'm not saying I agree with it. First of all, who is your audience? Knowing your audience is important ...

Hiya Retrodisco666! I agree with JasmineHart on most points. Your lack of consistent tense is definitely the main problem in this poem. My skin is torn, salt in my pores, ...

Hiya there, JamesMarcus! Did you take these photos yourself? They look like something you would see in a sports magazine! They are excellent! What did you use for the white ...

Hi Solvery! I know this poem would only rhyme and flow well in Spanish, but do you mind translating it to English, too? I am okay at Spanish -- I ...

Your descriptions are so fresh and brilliant, Blackbird12! Pregnancy itself is often written about (especially how the woman got pregnant), but I think it's fair to say that the actual ...

Howdy Sierra! I see you've followed through with some of my suggestions, and I am thoroughly pleased! He listened to the slow beat of his heart rate monitor, his hands ...

Hiya there! I just have to say, I'd like to see this as some sort of an opinion essay. I mean, there wasn't much to differentiate this "poetry" from any ...

Hiya, TheWriters! First of all, great title -- an excellent way to lure readers in! First of all, I'll just go along and correct some technical things in red. Alex ...

What a thrillingly creepy story! It sort of reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe's, "A Telltale Heart." However, your story didn't have the guilt at the end. I agree, it ...

Hiya there Lakegirls! Oh my, this was sweet. I'll bet this was as sweet as that lemonade. ;) On hot, hot summer mornings, when the sun was so bright it ...

All I can say is wow. Wow. Wow. Looks like you've been paying attention in Tech Ed. Wait, am I the only person who's required to have that in middle ...

You certainly have talent, Mystical Blood! The shading in those animated pictures is excellent. However, your work doesn't really fit on the computer screen, making it pretty difficult to view. ...

This poem has a very nice flow, and it is excellent considering you were half asleep when you wrote it. Trapped in my world which I despise, Wide awake with ...