Abigail_W.

Hello there! I have, indeed, seen your Jonas Brothers fan-fiction article. I dearly apologize, that I do, but I hate the Jonas Brothers awfully, and don't even know their names, ...

Hi Timothy, and welcome! If you're looking for honest feedback, this is absolutely the right place to come. Go ahead, now, and post a few reviews. Then, when you're ready, ...

This story isn't in poetry because it doesn't have the right format. It's about living with a drugged mother, and, one day, waking up to see her lying on the ...

This is a very interesting poem with a lot of meaning to it. However, for flow, I think a few words could be edited. Perhaps you could separate the lines ...

What is the smoke concealing? What are the perfumes of? With a bit more indication, here you would have an excellent poem. I think this would be nice if the ...

Thank you so much for the advice! I have a blog discussion about this at

You see her at dinner the night before. Drugged and crazy, her eyes meet with yours for a millisecond. Giant, watery-blue orbs above heavy, heavy, purple bags. Wildly bloodshot. Threatening. ...

Hi, Haimerej, and welcome to YWS! So far, you seem to be doing pretty well with one of the main rules here: no cht talk. We try to speak like ...

Hi DreamingOutloud and Pretty Crazy! First of all, I just have to say . . . great choice of usernames! There's not a thing to worry about when posting new ...

You have just taken a cliche and overused idea and made it your own. Applaud yourself. Who would ever think to use smell to portray an idea? Touch and sight ...

Hi Miniauthor, and welcome! I appreciate the detailed descriptions in this piece, although I agree with the post above me. The passive tense does get on my nerves a little, ...

The lighting, everything! Just . . . wow! Absolutely amazing. Post some more, please.

I'm not sure whether the last sentiment is overused or not; that's why I'm asking you. I got the idea of the story when taking a walk on the beach ...

Half him and half her course through my veins They are there My hair, my blood, my short fingernails They are me Although I am both, there is but one ...

Hi Aly! Have fun on this site, and write away! Any puns there were completely intended, though not funny at all. :oops: