Abigail_W.

In my eyes, this post needs no help. You completely captured that sensation, and took words that I can't elaborate on right out of my mouth. The title is excellent, ...

I often find that, in my eager attempts to be descriptive, my wording becomes very heavy. Criticism is smiled upon! ~~~~~~~~~~~ The teenager on the corner with the misapplied lip ...

Thanks for the advice, Young gun, and I'll post what I come up with in a new thread in a little bit.

Considering that the idea is a bit overused, (you yourself said it was "basic") this would make a very nice song, I believe. The words are nice, but, honestly, I ...

I like the ending to the poem; it was certainly not cliche at all, although I expected differently, considering the title. One suggestion I might have if for you to ...

The adjectives and the descriptions in this poem were rather lovely, although I'd like to make just a couple of suggestions. : ) May I propose the idea of eliminating ...

I might say that the topic of "best friend" is a bit overused, but, when described with originality, the reader can get the feeling that they have never read a ...

My username is Abigil. It was a slip-up; I was too quickly attempting to type "Abigail."

In the last line, I meant for it to be, " Sorrow thrives a million times . . ." Please excuse the typo. :oops:

Husbands sigh upon the bills and rub their eyes in anguish Clorox-scented housewives work to toil over dishes People live the days of life and work upon their chores Children ...

You certainly achieved the goal of making the reader feel your emotions. :cry: I like the repetition in the first stanza, as it adds effect. I have a couple of ...

I like the laid-back attitude with which you write, although there were some spelling and grammar mistakes. If you rechecked your comma use and made sure you used one consistent ...