Acid_Fairy

it's not awful at all, it was really good! i really liked this bit- it's so true to what teenagers feel like! So these are my teenage years? With nothing ...

i really hate it when no-one comments so i will- this probably wont be very helpful-but anyways... i really like it, although i didn't understand most of it (lots of ...

this is a really great idea for a present! id love to get something like this!!! i loved this part If you were just a storyteller, that would be one ...

i loved the ending! it was really great, but i didn't like the end rest so didn't seem to...erm..match (can't think of a better work) the ending somehow but i ...

no it isn't bad at at all! i liked it. i liked how you described this part: 'The house feels like it is waiting, like Grandma has gone to the ...

yes it was extremly good! theres a word to describe it, but i can't think of it right now... ummm like...descriptive, but that isn't the word. oh well. i liked ...

i think you should do maybe a prologue and describe what happened that night. it would quite effective if you did that part in the present tense, and then switched ...