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This was interesting, a very different take on Twlight. I like that you made this so different, that you made it your own. But, it was too bitter.

This was wonderful, I love Twilight, and to read something totally different, was refreshing, I loved the idea of Edward having a sister, finally another girl in his life to ...

This was wonderful, I love Twilight, and to read something totally different, was refreshing, I loved the idea of Edward having a sister, finally another girl in his life to ...

This was really sad, but in a good way because it tells people to never give up hope. Like the old saying 'Never give up, never surrender!' I liked it ...

I liked it, it's different. But I kinda agree with Snoink, show me don't tell me. That's my critque to you, but really good job.

I thought it was good, just got kinda tired of words repeating themselves. But other then that it was very creative, and enjoying. =)

Thank you both, I am working on the things you said that needed to be fixed. I realize it doesn't sound like a "Fantasy" book yet. But I'll post something ...