Adnamarine

This is lovely, and simple, and sad. I appreciate that it's not overbearing or melodramatic. I like the concrete images you give the reader. It's very easy to visualize the ...

Lumi, you know I love your poetry. This piece was no disappointment. You managed to balance right on on that thin, hard-to-find line of writing that is matter-of-fact, but not ...

You are a beautiful writer. I like the openness and ease and the way the meaning lies right under the surface. So often poems have so many twists and turns ...

This is one of the more stunning pieces I have read recently, really beautiful. The word choices are especially effective and really make the piece. They aren't overdone or too ...

There aren't a lot of stories that draw me in and hold me, like this one. You have a very easy-to-read style--not too wordy, not too vague, not bland; you ...

I am not typically drawn to love poems. This piece, however, is bittersweet and honest. I enjoyed it quite a bit really. I thought the line breaks worked really well. ...

Intriguing piece, smile (love your username, by the way). There were some things I absolutely loved about it...and a couple structural things that I didn't understand. First of all, I'm ...

I'm not sure why you don't take your poetry seriously =) Cheesy? Well... It had a couple cheesy lines in there, and definitely was very...lovey-dovey? I hate that phrase but ...

Hi Omi! I can tell this is very heartfelt piece. The overall theme is strong, I think, and comes through very clearly. However, there are a few lines that take ...

I don't usually review short stories; I tend to stick to poetry, but I stopped in to read this and was intrigued. So I thought I'd offer my thoughts. I ...

Hey Money! I was so happy to see you posted this! For a beginner (ish) poet, using rhyme was brave! It can be difficult to pull off gracefully. I don't ...

Very thoughtful poem...which I just realized is the whole essence to the title :P Well, in any case, this is definitely an idea that anyone can relate to. I don't ...

It was hard to tell whether you were going for a playful tone or a serious tone--I'm going to assume serious. The parts where you wrote "Building / Building; Building ...

Short as this is, I like it. I like that you don't have the stereotypical description of darkness. It goes from darkness, to green. And typically we think of green ...

I'm torn between being intrigued by the structure, and enjoying the purity of just the words the way that you read them aloud (you have a lovely voice, by the ...