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  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Run, Fat Boy, Run! Day 5 (Part Two)

    Hey man! You must tell me how you get so many reviews :-)-- Well, grammatically this was more-or-less sound - just a few thoughts: Meranda said and stood up from ...

    May 28, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Darling Elodie

    Alright, firstly, not a bad poem. However I must emphasise how there is little to make it a good one as such, also. I believe even a story the poem ...

    May 27, 2008
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: No Country For Old Men - Critical Lens Essay

    Hi jenna! I'm a little tired, but I will have a look through for you :wink: Alright, on to the crit: According to Lord Chesterfield, “You must look into people ...

    May 26, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: An ode to those who dream

    Hey Eimear, thanks for posting in my review thread, let's see what I can offer: Don’t you often wonder of how those who have been born with the gift of ...

    May 26, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Angels Really Do Exsist

    Before I give a crit, YWS does ask that you keep your review:submission ratio at 2:1, that way more people will like you and you will get better reviews. “Hey ...

    May 26, 2008
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Anniversary

    Hi Icaruss, thanks for posting in my review topic. And the roof is falling apart and the rusty door-knobs are giving me a rash. The excessive number of ‘and’s in ...

    May 26, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fragments

    Hi man! Since I can't actually read the poem how you set it out, I will separate it to how best I think it should go: I would say: Framed ...

    May 26, 2008
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Brisingr (Eragon 3) Spoiler

    Look at this! Click here! It's another 'spoiler'. I mean, just look at him! Scroll down to the video, and watch it. It is so cheap, he really thinks he ...

    May 25, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: 042. Tinfoils, Earth Sans Soil [rewritten]

    Hi Imp! Sorry I took my time getting to this - let's hope my feedback can be of some help. Fleeting melody I feel this should be plural, since you ...

    May 25, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Run, Fat Boy, Run! Day 5 (Part One)

    Hiya! I will remain loyal to this thing, because I enjoy it so much :-) Anyway, I have put the grammar and recommendations on line-by-line nitpicks into a Word '03 ...

    May 24, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Run, Fat Boy, Run! Day 4

    I haven't read this yet? Woah... please tell me I’m not crazy This seems awkwardly worded. How about 'please don't tell me I'm crazy'. I think it flows better. I ...

    May 24, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Child of Ashes: Outcast- Prologue

    Grrr... I see I posted a review on here when I first started... in my dark days. That was very unhelpful I see, so here is my proper version! ^_^ ...

    May 18, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Chasing Rainbows Chapter 2

    Hey Vernon! I will get to the others soon enough, fear not! Anyway, I thought this was a very intriguing chapter; I am interested in the love affair between Eolen ...

    May 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: What people see in you

    Hi Drifter. YWS does ask you to do at least two reviews per one submission you make, to keep the balance. Firstly, I will ask you to do the spell ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Cain Part One

    Hey! Is this yet another story I spy Jared? hiding deer, game Deer meat (venison) counts as game. a natural , [COMMA] born hunter. His heart fluttered and his bow? ...

    May 15, 2008


Let yourself be silently drawn by the strange pull of what you really love. It will not lead you astray.
— Rumi