Aedomir

Hey Fang! I feel it is my duty to give you a review, so I will, but I have noticed that you have equal reviews to submissions: please correct this ...

Hello prefect! Nice to meet you, I'm Mark :-) I am sorry to say, but you have broken a rule on YWS: we do ask that you keep your review:submission ...

Hey! Why has no one reviewed this yet? I took a step into the sea and got on my knees and just felt the water seep through the clothing and ...

Hey! Enjoying YWS? I would just like to point out first the we do ask you to do two reviews for every submission you make, please correct this :-) Anyway: ...

Hello! My heart it beating through my chest, Nice idea... but a little 'done'. I reckon you could portray the same idea in a different form, with a few metaphors, ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! I am sorry to say, but YWS does requre that you do at least two reviews per submission, please correct this :wink: Because I am fantastic, ...

Hello! I said I would get to it… The room is silent, the air so tense I nearly choke. Great opening line here. Perhaps an ‘and’ after the comma may ...

Hey! I don't really know what it is, but interesting nevertheless. Genius is anything new. Cliché isn’t new, but at the same time it is. Oh the irony :wink: seriously ...

Hey! Mind if I take a look...? I thought not: I found that this just wasn't dramatic enough. By all means, repetition can be great, but not in this amount. ...

Hey, welcome to the site! My stubborn lover, my mistress at heart she coxes me on when others would depart. I would put a comma after 'heart' and remove the ...

Hello! I am really sorry, but this is just too much. I mean, this is 10,000 words - I don't think anyone will be able to sit through this. I ...

Hey! I must say, I found that very entertaining. The way you managed to poor in so much cliché stuff, and still keep me interesting was great. The last stanza ...

Hello! Firstly before I get into the actual poem, I will say to to remember that just because it is the start of the line, you do not need to ...

Hey Jared! I think I checked this out a few days ago, but didn't have time to crit. Alright... Damned... so cold… almost gone. Dread spreading on. Lovely opening, not ...

Hi! :-) This is a very short piece, and I see it has already been reviewed to death with grammar, but I will just add my thoughts if you don't ...