Aedomir

Again, again. Thanks for the review, but chapter one is getting deleted and I will get rid of all the old 'Deus ex Machina'. Trust me... Thanks!

Don't worry, Ia am rewriting chapter one entirely. And you may find the piece in the Advanced Critques to be of more help, it includes the entire first 7 parts ...

Ye, I remember thanks for the review BBB. Actually, if you look just below it says: Usage Note: Some critics have tried to discern a semantic distinction between toward and ...

Thanks for the review, it is really appreciated. I belive towards is a word, although toward is preferred. It is strange, I never even heard of toward, :-D. I think ...

To be fair, I wrote this AGES ago. Believe me, it has come a long way since. I don't go for imitation, can I just say. If my style is ...

Please review!

Erm... am I missing something? Did you delete something? Was this a joke or what? I mean... you are a great writer and just... what?!

As everyone else as said, gramamr and punctuation are spot on, and the way you managed to speak so gratly about a butterfuly is just increidible. Butterflies are just beautiful, ...

Thanks! Don't worry, I like feedback more than anything, grammar I don't worry about too much.

if you're sure... let me know when you post something up.

! Harry Potter! Thanks a lot! I am in the process of rewritng this chapter, but it will do for now. Thank you!`

Thanks! Don't worry, I like feedback more than anything, grammar I don't worry about too much.

No prob, I think she means about their history, personality etc. I'm sure that's explained elsewhere though, so don't worry.

I think Exhaustion is spelled wrong. No that's right. I noticed you used "waned" a lot. I noticed that actually lol. I really liked how Seridon tried to cut away ...

Hiya! Thanks for the crit, really apprieciated. I like this part, and yeah, I intend to talk about what lives in the lake. Amplituod is jsut Latin, which is what ...