AmethystNight

Hello, So, this is a very good piece with a nice balance of dialogue and description. Your dialogue between characters is very well written and gives a good feel for ...

As usual, wow! This is a fantastic follow up to the last chapter. You had a heart wrenching moment, now a heart in your mouth moment. You've done a really ...

I like how you start this piece, focussing on time. I can imagine that that is exactly what would weigh on your mind the most if you were in prison, ...

Ok, firstly, as a fellow violin lover and player, not a very good one but still, I can completely relate to this poem. The way that you depict the beauty ...

This is a good, simplistic poem. It's to the point and doesn't hide behind anything fancy just says what it wants to say. Imagine a world of peace. Where the ...

This is nice. I found it very calming. I always like shorter poems because I feel that it's better to leave a quick impact, which you've done rather well here. ...

This is great, a lovely and unique perspective on time passing. I like the length, not too long, not too short - it's quite appropriate not to use up too ...

Before I start the review I just want to mention something. I'm not sure if it's that YWS has messed up your formatting, because it does do that sometimes, or ...

This is really good. The description is detailed and interesting. You have a nice introduction to the piece. There are also very few grammatical errors. My first piece of advice ...

This is a very good piece. It's well written with good use of description and convincing characters and character relationships. I like the little bits of information about the world ...

Wow! Just wow! This is my favourite chapter yet. The way that Bella is forced to confront the consequences of what she's done is fantastic. I have a feeling that ...

I like how you opened your piece. It's a nice, sweet start that gives the reader a chance to relax before you start with the action in the scene. You ...

This is a great piece and, though I haven't read the rest of the story, I can safely say that I am enjoying your plot, what I've seen of it ...

This is good and your story is intriguing. I can't wait to find out more about this world that you've created and I looooooooove magic, so when she started casting ...

What you've got here is great, some nice descriptions, a good sense of what's to come in the story. There are a few gramatical errors that I'll outline below that ...