AquaMarine

ah thanks, sorry it's bad but i just got back from holiday so i had to write something, i have been waiting for a bit of sun for a year! ...

yeah that didn't relate to me at all but i liked it, totally true of our generation. and funnily enough people have tagged hair on some of my facebook photos. ...

Dark thoughts, hate and violence. i don't know but to me hate and violence are kind of cliched "dark" thoughts. maybe you wanted them there but im pretty sure there ...

The scorching sun, The blazing heat, Pounding down, Onto the street. A whirlwind of lotions, Bikinis and tans. Painted nails, Magazines and fans. Packing all you need For a warm, ...

Hey! I thought this was really good! I liked the unspoken metaphor in the first stanza - that people will follow other people through their life, doing the same things ...

Hi there, i really enjoyed reading this piece, it holds memories that i have too! So, Climbing over broken branch and unused stile, Feet tripping on the grass. Sun glaring ...

Loved it! those still frames.. can't hide shit.. your not happy... i can see it.. so at the start i thought it was rhyming 'cause of this, but it's less ...

thanks for that, the punctuation mistakes were all accidental, as was the lack of a full stop, i will correct those in a sec. My idea of "faded denim" was ...

i did really like the rhythm and rhyme in this, it flowed well and none of the rhymes felt forced. But i think one of the reasons they weren't forced ...

when i started to read this i loved the rhyme and rhythm, it was perfect! but this section didn't work so well. and rub your nose. I just want Your ...

The deepest ocean; The clearest sky. A soaring eagle flying high. Faded denim trudging the sand; A piercing eye surveying the land. Glistening waves rushing to shore, and darting creatures ...

Wow! (yes, i had to review it!) I really like this, it has a really peaceful rhythm and flow, it just reads well i guess. I agree with the ellipsis ...

i didn't really get this poem, but i have to agree with the above. Please, just please, delete the repetition. Don't get me wrong, i love repetition when it's used ...

i guess i'm pretty much agreeing with everyone else, i love the idea of the piece, i really liked these lines There's a vice sitting on my chest like an ...

Totally brilliant! thanks it made my morning. I disagree with some of the comments, the way you used parts from the actual book just made it better for me! But ...