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Arashi

  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Along the way

    I dunno I didnt want to change anything to be honest I was going through something when I wrote this so it just feels better left along but I get ...

    Dec 7, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Along the way

    For anyone who reads this I was yooooooung when I wrote this not that I'm old now lol

    Dec 3, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Along the way

    Don't know how much more I can take my life's already complicated as can be feel like I'm going to break may as well give up I've had enough you ...

    Dec 3, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Poem of the Prisoner

    Amazing like nothing Ive ever read before. Great job I'm speechless lol your poem was a unique read. Beautifully done.

    Nov 23, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Gossip

    Hahaha nice one lol you could have added the consequences of gossip maybe? dunno but overall nice general ideal well played out.

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Deeply Cut!

    I agree as well its been said and done but I feel like you can add something more to this poem? dunno nice read though keep at it :)

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Narrative Poetry Re: He played his guitar without ever seeing the strings

    It perfect very inspiring haha no other words for it I felt like I was almost transported there! Great job let me know when you have another poem out.

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Pain

    Nice tribute to Emily :) I also know some ppl that have cancer. Sometimes you just have to let it out. I agree as well with everyone above youre being ...

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: My poetry

    I like it :) nice beginning and I loved how you made it more personal and summed it all up so well at the end. Great job

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Loves curse

    Haahah reminds me a bit of D.N.Angel or other video games lol nice done keep it up I especially like how you linked the words together. Well done I will ...

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Colors of Me

    you might want to make the poem a bit longer? other than that it was nicely done :) you could have ended it differently for example But dreaming in every ...

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Always you

    At the end of the day when the worlds up and gone away I curl up and cry wanting to die asking God why? swear I can feel you beside ...

    Nov 22, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Sleeping Angel

    Beautiful and inspiring the love that you show in your poem. Its real and a bit raw which isn't necessary a bad thing. Keep on writing :)

    Nov 20, 2008
  • Narrative Poetry Re: A Kiss at Dawn

    Okay umm where to start? lol you have a definite storyline its jumbled and confused your only 14 so realize and let go... edit here and there and the poem ...

    Nov 20, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Life Through My Eyes

    Very well put but you could add something more kinda of have the words clipped of one another? to make a more drastic affect? dunno but great poem I would ...

    Nov 20, 2008


Remember when dad's shoulders were the highest place on earth and your mom was your hero? Race issues were about who ran the fastest, war was only a car game. The most pain you felt was when you skinned your knees, and good byes only meant tomorrow? And we couldn't wait to grow up.
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