Arion

Actually, the model is from a book I finished a few weeks ago, so if I were to get it published it would show that these were people living in ...

I've never had a problem starting a sentence with and or but, just because, that's my style of writing. It's choppy. (see). So, I think and or but works for ...

Um...it's hard to say. Apart from the few small typo's here and there, it seems like you have the beginnings to a well developed character, then again, there are a ...

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I'll let Arion take this one... Okay, so, at first (other)Arion felt the same way you did. Why was I just sitting back and watching. And the emotions (or lack ...

I disagree with Chocoholic. Yes, having the mother think it's unfeminist and wrong would mix it up a bit, but that completely takes away from the main character, who doesn't ...

Sorry, no snide remarks here :D I know what you mean about there needing to be flashbacks, those come later. And I also get what you're trying to say about ...

She wasn't afraid for herself, she was afraid for Katya, which was why she tryed not to show fear until it became to protect Katya. although if I have to ...

She wasn't afraid for herself, she was afraid for Katya, which was why she tryed not to show fear until it became to protect Katya.

Thank you! (tries sounding out name, fails, gives up, and adds it to list anyways)

The Slavics (Along with baltics, german, and many others), portray death as a woman. How did death become a woman? I think the answers to all your questions can be ...

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Oh, I didn't do kind of happened on it's own when I posted it. Sorry Anyways, I'm just about to post the second chapter. Thank you for the good reviews. ...

Apparently, you can't delete something after a certain period of time...

Curious...The vampire mythology section is just for us, right? It's not actually part of the book? After reading this over I only have a few comments. I did read your ...