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People would this work fine? Changing, "My voice as feeble as a barely breathing young wolf, who has just washed ashore after falling into a frozen river." to "My voice ...

That was pretty much what I was pondering about. However now the color thing is confusing me. Is there like one for a negative, and another color for a test ...

Name:Shadow,(He was an orphan, so he never had a real name). Gender: Male Age: 18 Description: 5' 10, black greasy hair, pale skin, for having been only in the moonlight ...

Wow, that story hits a bit close to home. I can sort of relate to Lexine. He likes helping people but no one cares about him. Sounds like me and ...

Shadow Man had only been walking through Lizard Men Bog for thirty minutes and he had already killed three of the hunting beasts. He wiped the blood from his blades ...

Shadow Man was still, listening intently to the footsteps. Yes, footsteps, there were two pairs. The wild beasts in the distance continued to howl. "No, don't cry Hansel we'll find ...

Shadow Man kept on running the cool night time air beating at his scarf. Not even the wind dared to take his scarf of. It it did he would kill ...

I knew that part.

No! No! That lunatic stopped my perfect kill! Shadow Man shook with uncontrollable spasms of rage. He ran out of his hiding place and rushed the man who looked like ...

How do pregnancy test strips work? How do they tell a person if they are pregnant? A character in my book uses one to see if she is pregnant. But ...

Shadow Man pulled out Misty, and kissed the blade. With a flick of his wrist he threw the knife at the woman. Is it going to hit my target? Or ...

The Shadow Man watched from the shadows. He was so concealed that not even an eagle flying overhead would have seen him. And if it did he would take it ...

The words in red are corrections that I made. A moment later something glinted catching my eye it was at the surface. I moved over slowly and unsurely towards it ...

Here is one of my stories. Action/Adventure -Thank you, I'll be sure and return the favor.

The writing seems a bit rushed at times. But, over all not too bad. Kind of makes me think of my school. The kind of girl in your story is ...