AspiringAuthorA..M.

I feel like writing a sequel now.

You get a creepy alien video, the second part is scary. The first part is just so so. -inserts plastic coin- *Reads that it says, is not genuine legal tender*

Hello there homie, hehe, I've always wanted to say that. Long rows of dark grey clouds swam through the deep black ocean; littered only by a vague glisten of a ...

*First person perspective sentences or phrases are in italics in my original version, so there is no need to point out that issue* Since Jasminebells had trouble wondering what was ...

Thanks. And hehe, I get mixed reviews with the things I do. Sometimes I'm told that my sentences are way too long and that I take forever to get to ...

You get a YWS skeleton. :P -inserts coin-

8/10 Hm, I wonder what they could be. I'm guessing either leaves that are blowing as they fall from trees as the October wind blows or fires blazing around your ...

*Wherever you see the narrative switch to first person that is a character's thoughts* Everything ended as quickly as it had begun, leaving the motionless animals' coats drenched with ice ...

*Wherever you see the narrative switch to first person that is a character's thoughts* Everything ended as quickly as it had begun, leaving the motionless animal's coats drenched with ice ...

Your curse has destroyed all things I hold close. Now I fear that you have passed on your disease to me. I hate everyone around me, and everyone around me ...

Well, I must salute you, that was perhaps the funniest thing I have ever had the pleasure of reading. But here are a few things that I must bite you ...

I think you could use a better word than boomed. Echoed maybe? 5/10 Heres mine: The small room is filled with many clothes and costumes. I already used that word ...

*The browser closed me out of my reviewing session, so yeah, I'm mad at my computer right now. By the way, I was doing your review while it happened* :( ...

Goodness, I've been looking for that book everywhere. But then again, it's supposed to be written in a silly style from what I've heard. I personally don't think I'd like ...

I'd say you're right, I should go with first person. Because as of the current third person that I made the story one of the biggest things I've been told ...