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tell me the story about how the sun loved the moon so much he died every night to let her breathe.

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Realistic Re: A Polar Bear's Story chapter 1

    Hello there, Mikothegreat! This is Moonwatcher here for a review! ^-^ "Mom I can't sleep! can you tell me a story?" Rain asked pleading with me. "Why can't you fall ...

    Nov 5, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Spooky Romance - 1

    Hello there, Eros! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ "Maria, have you finished packing your books or are they still overflowing from the cupboard? And I already told ...

    Nov 5, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical Re: When Life danced...

    Hello there, Sharon1407! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ The capitalization of the word "Life" caught my eye right from the beginning. I agree with the previous reviewer ...

    Nov 5, 2016
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Realistic Re: Hard Life

    Hello there, DeepRoses! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ I truly apologize that in my last review on one of your poems, you seemed to disagree with my ...

    Nov 4, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Literature Re: Sunshine filled Cold Days

    Hello there, GreenTulip! This is Moonwatcher here for a review! ^-^ Glimmering sunshine, Gives into the allusion Of warmth and happiness. Though it is all a lie. I'm not the ...

    Nov 4, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: Woh muskurana tera yaad aaya

    Hello there, Nishthabawa2896! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ First things first, I don't speak Hindi. YWS primarily consists of English users, and it isn't a surprise that ...

    Nov 4, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Movie Night in the West

    Hello there, Remembrance! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ The use of punctuation, I have found, is inconsistent. On that screen in front of him He stood, Inconsistent ...

    Nov 3, 2016
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Romantic Re: My Lovely Night

    Hello there, Pastelqueen! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ The length of this poem kind of makes it less enjoyable to me. I feel as if it's filled ...

    Nov 3, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: My short poem

    Hello there, CuriosityCat2! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ I would like to point out the title of the poem, which is simply just called, "My short poem." ...

    Nov 2, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Grace's Demons: Chapter one- 14 years later

    Hello there, Casanova! ^-^ This is Moonwatcher here for another review! I'm happy to see another installment of your novel. This is a nice, and short chapter, but longer than ...

    Nov 2, 2016
  • Poetry » Satire, Dramatic Re: "Until Then"

    Hello there, Pendr! This is Moonwatcher here for a review! I would like to point out that the poem is labeled as satire. sat·ire ˈsaˌtī(ə)r/ noun the use of humor, ...

    Nov 2, 2016
  • Other » General, General Re: Apathy of the Weasle

    Hello there, KanekiManjushage! This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^ I feel as if the poem is extremely choppy. There's abrupt stops, and every line is very short. There's ...

    Nov 2, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Narrative Re: Unanswered Questions

    Hello there, Alliyah! This is Moonwatcher here for a review! ^-^ I would like to bring up the use of stanzas in this poem. I think it could benefit from ...

    Nov 2, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Action / Adventure Re: Insidious: Prologue

    Hey there, Casanova! This is Moonwatcher here with another review! ^-^ Yooo, so this is one thing I forgot to mention in my last review for another chapter of yours. ...

    Nov 2, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Be my rock ❤

    Hello there, GreenTulip! This is Moonwatcher here for a review! ^-^ (please be considerate and ignore any typos you may find, i'm on mobile and writing a mobile review is ...

    Nov 2, 2016


You'd better wise up, Pony... you get tough like me and you don't get hurt. You look out for yourself and nothing can touch you, man.
— Dallas Winston, The Outsiders