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Re: Shades of Violet(1)[revised]
I loved this. While there were some awkward phrases and probably some grammatical errors, I'm not one to get real nit-picky with critiques, and I can't find any real pressing ...
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Re: A scene from my story
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Re: A scene from my story
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Mar 2, 2010 -
Re: Swimming Against the Kolyma River
With everyone commenting on the beauty of your opening paragraph (with which I agree), I just wanted to clarify by "passive voice" I mean the grammatical use of "is", "were", ...
Mar 2, 2010 -
Re: short excerpt from my story
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Re: The Last Cry Of Crime (Prologue)
I liked it, you can write really well. One thing though, it was a bit over-descriptive for my taste; by the second paragraph I was kinda thinking "I get it ...
Mar 2, 2010 -
Re: Lucita
Good job. I liked how it wasn't your cliche high school story about girl meets boy :). But mostly I just wanted to correct your Spanish. Now, the extent of ...
Mar 2, 2010 -
Re: Sleep Now My Child
Damn, this is really good. I'm trying to maintain a distinct voice while at the same time covering a broad range of emotions. ^ I thought you did that perfectly; ...
Feb 27, 2010 -
Re: Beware Doll, You're Bound to Fall
Wow, solid observations, thank you so much for reviewing it! Haha, yeah Adele is freaky. I can't really explain much more though, it's too complicated, but you'll probably understand a ...
Feb 27, 2010 -
Re: Swimming Against the Kolyma River
I really liked this; you have a talent for creating a scene and drawing a reader in. I only have a few comments. First of all, is this about the ...
Feb 27, 2010 -
Re: Beware Doll, You're Bound to Fall
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