AubrielRose

Thank you for posting this. It actually kind of helped me with something I'm going through right now. The writing was interesting and I loved how you referred back to ...

I liked this a lot. You protrayed death in a very interesting way, making it seem as a watcher, with none of the power/influence that Death is usually supposed to ...

I completely agree with the point you are making here. I live in a small, very religious town and I have rather atheistic views. I know what it's like to ...

I liked it a lot!!!! It made me all warm and fuzzy inside. I do recommend going through it a little bit and working on some imagery and relation to ...

I actually meant the guy as extrmemely religious.

This is an idea almost any girl can relate to and I love how you ended it with a sense of strength over the narrarator's view of herself. (I assume ...

I love how you expressed the self-debate so well. As others have suggested, I do recomend toning the anger down just a bit, it seems just a little overhwelming. It ...

ok I put this in a more poetical format, but evidently my computer had a different opinion about that...

This is a great concerpt, however, the rhythm in the first stanza doesn't seem to follow through the entire poem.

this might've been a better fit for dramatic poetry but oh well

My name is actually Aubriel Rose by the way. And I know how to spell Vonnegut I just kind of had a brain glitch. Oops.