Autumn.Breeze.

Nah, I know you're not. It's just hard for me because some of the things you guys critique are things that involve the future portions of the story, so it's ...

Yay!!! You already got the third one out! It was hot and humid and many of the sailors were bare-chested as they went about their duties. The sentence structure is ...

Okay, this is the last of the chapters already written out. It's also the last chapter when you are forced to read about only new characters. Yes they're more characters. ...

Eeeeeep!!! I'm sooooo sorry it took so long to read this. Okay, here I go! At dusk his stiff body was ceremoniously laid into a plundered rowboat and lowered into ...

Fangala : It's really hard to respond to this because a lot of the things you said, you have to take into account the future events of the story. So, ...

She frowned with disillusionment of the display of unacquainted happiness. It was a fixation that was truly abominable and the woman was more than jovial to be the impudence in ...

Lisa: Oh my goodness, a good chunk of the stuff you pulled out I completely missed and I'm glad you caught them. Others actually questioned my writing style which will ...

Please let me know what you think, any grammatical issues, and anything that could be improved upon. Central Park wasn't on the top of her list for places to visit ...

Peering out the portholes Josette couldn’t see much but the hull of the other boat. Peering out the portholes , Josette couldn’t see much but the hull of the other ...

Once Lemon asked her mother what she used the can for and she said: It's so that I can go to my happy place. The way you brought this into ...

I just have to say, your analogies are amazing and got some laughs from me. Today might have been beautiful, what with the sprays of cherry blossoms and the pearly ...

In any case, she’s close by, and if Mam’s voice rings out she can duck around the corner and be there in half a second. Get ride of In any ...

I want to say my tid bit for the thing above. I think you should keep the 'gonna' and 'wanna'. since it's in quotes, it works better than proper language. ...

Wow, this story was really weird. This is definitely the first of it's kind. My favorites would have to be the Puppet one and the Superman one. The puppet one ...

Since no one posted here yet, I decided to check it out. That couldn’t do it or anything else any good, but it felt good to him. I love where ...