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  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Destiny

    Hello! Your song is nice, but the message is unclear. It seemed a little too tentative and vague. I would suggest spicing it up with some detailed imagery and creative ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Rain in My Bottle

    Hey there. When I read this I couldn't help but think of the Police. Maybe that's just because the title sounds so much like "Message in a Bottle." :) I'm ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Poisoned Needle (Death Metal)

    What's up. I really dig the introduction; you took something that's been done a lot in metal music and gave it your own spin. I felt it again I only ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Thunder and the Revenant(edited)

    Hey there! I am going to comment as I go... The silent engine increasing dramatically in speed as the rider clamped her hand tightly on the acceleration of the motorcycle. ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Back to Back

    When I read it aloud and with a strong rhythm, it's really cool. Very lively. Not a vague grasp at a myriad of emotion like a lot of poetry, but ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Yellow

    Wonderful poetry. Your writing has personality . :D It is very abrupt and temporary, which is a good thing, but you might consider tempering it with something concrete, something the ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: But no one ever takes their socks off before sex!

    First, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. It was emotionally involving from the start, a very satisfying read. I would say that the first stanza seems to awake a certain emotion ...

    Jul 1, 2009


More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Tree of Wishes