BadNarrator

The question I kept asking as I read this story excerpt was "Why is she telling him this?" I wouldn't start the story with this conversation, but just before it. ...

Hey I'm critiquing your story now. First of all the spelling mistakes were very distracting so I took the liberty of running this story through spellcheck before reading it. But ...

Hey I'm BadNarrator and I'll be reviewing your story today. As I approach the mysterious object with anticipation, a shiver of excitement runs down my spine. It was early morning, ...

Uh...I usually try to avoid critiquing stories like these but I guess I can take a crack at it. Once upon a time there was a enigmatic little imp named ...

Laden with ice and swaying in the bitter Alaskan wind the pines crackled in an eerie orchestra that could be mistaken for the thrashing and snapping of a wild animal's ...

A tragic loss of a friend. Ernest Hemingway said that every great story should include a death. I think it was Hemingway who said that. Anyway, despite the need for ...

Despite its length I found this story to be very intriguing. Unfortunately it is lacking in description which is always important for shorter stories. Here are my suggestions: MY WORST ...

So first of all I want you to ignore all the complaints in the posts above me about people whining about the length of the story. Nothing annoys me more ...

I've got mixed feelings about the narrative mode you've chosen for the story. On the one hand I pretty much hate all 2nd person narrators, but on the other it ...

I enjoyed this story. I generally don't care for the lyrical writing style but I think you pulled it off very well. In all there are very few things I ...