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I found one thing. Flame mounted his horse, F eather. This should be capitalized because it's the horse's name. The whole thing was good, and I didn't find any other ...

Dear Reader, Where you are, wherever you are, wherever you are not, you are always one step away from the world which this book will introduce you to. Just keep ...

But it’s his wife’s condition that makes him refuse the foods that his swallowed in two bites . This sentence is confusing, I don't know what you mean. You are ...

I screamed the last time as I felt the paint take over my body for good and it all went black. For good? I would change it to completely taken ...

Who'd have guessed that our problems would be solved by such a small accident as this? They're problems are solved by losing each other? That's :cry: so sad :cry: