BlackDove

wow, this was really good I really enjoyed it alot. it was like something you read in one of those epic poetry books. not really my taste, poetry, but this ...

there are a few things you could do to improve this piece of writing. for example 1. you seem to start sentences a lot with "he" (he did this, he ...

this was very good. I enjoyed it from start to finish. though there were some little mistakes. "Before i could begin to stop myself"... Hmmm... this could sound a little ...

Note - this chapter has recently been edited Here is a book i have been writing. I never posted it anywhere before but i am desperate for some honest comments. ...

Not bad. A nice idea and i kinda liked it. Though there were some sentences that i thought were a little bit awkward and difficult to read. And the whole ...

“It Won’t Kill Anyone…” A group of teenagers stood and talked loudly at the end of a quiet street. Two boys and a girl, maybe fourteen or fifteen years old. ...

Yep! That's right. 17 syllables makes a haiku. I used to write haiku's about butterflies. :lol: I'll sign your guest book. yours BlackDove

This isn't bad. :D You have good ideas and the characters are interesting. Some of the words were well chosen and i enjoyed it for the most part. Bu i ...

Hello. I am BlackDove. I have only just joined this site and i would appreciate it if any of you would take a look at my stories when they are ...