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  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: You and I

    Hey voidbrain! I like your username ;) this is blackwater here for a review! First off, welcome to YWS! Hope you write many more pieces. I'd like to say that ...

    Aug 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Last Summer

    Hey! Blackwater here for a review :D I truly loved your poem. I love how you begin the poem, "I remember, last summer" It gives a beautiful nostalgic feeling to ...

    Aug 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Culture, Politics Re: The Engineer and the Enquirer.

    Hey Samia! This is blackwater here for a review. I'd like to agree with niteowl about the bold. The meaning of the poem is sort of lost because of that. ...

    Aug 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: The 5th of September

    Hey, LMJRayner! This is blackwater here for a review. First off, I'd like to point out how you haven't bothered to use any punctuations. "the air in the breeze was ...

    Aug 11, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, Romantic Re: Hallow

    Hey, this is black water here for a review! First off, I'd say that the only good things in this piece of poetry are the usage of words(which are yet ...

    May 27, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Stay

    As kayfortnight pointed out, I too agree that structure is a big part of good poetry. The poem would be a lot clearer if it were properly spaced and organized ...

    May 26, 2013


By the sweat of your brow you will eat your food until you return to the ground, since from it you were taken; for dust you are and to dust you will return.
— Genesis 3:19