Blink

Hey! I actually quite like the ending, in that it feels ongoing and endless. I think it works. :) That said, there are numerous grammatical errors going on here - ...

Hey! Nice story! But a few things: Watch out for tense changes - sometimes your character is talking in the present, but the descriptions are in the past. Eg, "Jack ...

Hey, Kitro. =] I agree that this poem was flat, and it was meaningless. It read as very ranty and I couldn't empathise with it whatsoever. In particular, the rhyme ...

TITLE. Where is the title? Give everything you write a title. Even "Angry Angst" looks better than "Untitled". But anyway. ;) Okay, now, I know this wasn't intended as a ...

Welcome to another edition of Blink's Unhelpful Reviews. I spent about 10 minutes reading and rereading this poem until I thought I understood what it was all about. And that's ...

This is brilliant! Thanks, Cal! So going to download all of these. :D (Even though I am somewhat un-green as of late. :P)

Elinor did a much better review than I can/have time for (sorry for not reviewing earlier!) since you need to submit this, but! Here are some thoughts: Face is stinging. ...

You took your time. =P Random - I don't know whether you're keeping the Lady Gaga song from ch.1, but I'd recommend that you just mentioned her in passing rather ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! :) No reviews? You know, you might get more if you did some yourself. I'm sure people would appreciate them. ;) Basic Grammar You really need ...

Hannah! Long time no see! Here as requested, albeit a little belated. =) Well, this was certainly a lovely little piece. The ambiguity was done very, very well. You want ...

A little late, but I'm here as requested! As I watched her, I realised immediately that she was different. She doesn't look different from our viewpoint - from what you've ...

Hey, Amanda! You should introduce yourself in the welcome forum. We don't bite. ;) I'm having trouble with this for a number of reasons. For one, it isn't a chapter ...

Here as requested! =D Well, I'm a sucker for nitpicks, but anyway. Let's look at the story. I read the prologue before this, so I'll probably do a double-review, or ...

Hey, Pacific. The problem at the soul of this poem is the story being narrated. I have no idea what it's going on about. It's the way you use really ...

Demistor! I hope you haven't forgotten about a certain show on tonight/tomorrow morning. Anyway, la critique. Well, I like how you sort of got bored with punctuation towards the end, ...