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quite interesting, and I like the way you've typified 21st century 'technology'. However what is a Cresco? Only other thing, the whole poem is written as if "I" am saying ...

quite funny :D The second stanza especially flows well, and the 'bee in the bonnet' bit fits the author quite well :lol:

now that is a poem after mine own heart :D Great rhyme, good rhythm, and a nice sentimental subject. A+. Only comment is that I think it finishes a bit ...

I know this is old, but I just thought I'd throw in my two cents worth. Looks like everyone has done a pretty thorough critique, but there's a few points ...

well first let me commend you on an interesting little piece! It would be well worth continuing it. In particular, I like the phrase "snowy embrace of home". Very poetical! ...

Just a quick question... Are you a firstborn child? 'Cause I am, and sometimes that's the kind of emotion I feel. Neat little poem, however I think that some of ...

I like it! Chocolate is meant to be written about... Good Job! Nah I'd rather eat it. Not a bad little poem. :wink: