Bugslake

This sounds like this assassin could be a really cool vigilanty if he/she were good. There are some missing capitals on some words. There are also words that have been ...

This is a very interesting beginning to a story that could be very good. There are points in the story where I don't know what's going on and it's mostly ...

This is a really good start to a story. I love the thought that women are pretty much in charge of hell. I am really sorry, but I don't know ...

I have been in this situation and it really does suck, but what I do is I bury the pain way deep down in the darkest part of my heart ...

Hey I always love scary stories, but it was hard to follow this one because there weren't any new paragraph each time you had a new thought. Every time you ...

Hey, this is a very good start to a story that could be absolutely amazing. Can't wait to read the next part of this. I do have to say that ...

This is a totally interesting character designs. I love the way you have thought about your characters, where they would be, and what they would be doing. There are some ...

This is the most amazing beginning to a story that I have ever read. There's so much detail and so much emotion within every word that it surprises me. There ...

I'm guessing that you agree at all with abortion, but I don't think that you should turn into a thing of hate and fear, but whatever. There are some times ...

I agree with emjayc, a blog could totally be your thing. There are some point when you Change subject meaning that you should also create a new paragraph. There are ...

This is the perfect creepy story. Definitely hit the creepy, stalker like thinking on the button. I really hope that it is not from experience. Just kidding, maybe. Anyway there ...

I definitely love your main character. Molls, strong on the surface but intricate underneath with feelings. I am so glad that you made this apocalypse plot and story interesting, I ...

I like the fact that you've thought your character through. It's times like these that I accidentally begin to think and act like my character. It is somewhat hard for ...

This is a very good beginning to a story that could really see some real compliments. I really like the contrast between Elouise and Thomas. It shows how much disorder ...

I love how much detail and thought you've put into the character. There are some grammar mistakes, but those can be looked over. I just applaud how much you've thought ...