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Re: The Way I Hide
It's an interesting poem, certainly capturing the writer in the moment. I don't know if you wanted it to be a blank poem (non rhythmic) or with rhymes because i ...
Jun 12, 2011 -
Re: Unforgettable Moment
Hiya! I liked your sentence structure and descriptive sense as halogirl4197 states. The topic seemed specifically chosen and a delicate one to write about: You did that very well, i ...
Jun 12, 2011 -
Re: Devil Swan
Thanx guys. I just came up with it when i was out on a holiday. It's not based on the movie at all, though I have seen it too...found it ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Devil Swan
I hope it's alright. It's a different sort of style I'm used to writing and I'd love to have all the help I can get to improve it :) Stareing ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Cindy and the dragon
It was good and xoCairo was right, you do have potential. The story had a good plot, but not a lot of description. It sounded as if you had wanted ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: Blood Lust
Wow, I really liked it. There was good description. Just a shame the way it ended so abruptly! Love to read more ;)
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: Inspiration?
I find my inspiration from the things i go through in life and what happens to the people around me. I'm always thinking and imagining - "What if", - my ...
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: Blue Boy
It was nice but I think you could do better ;). If you had put in a bit more description and punctuation it would help the reader get pulled into ...
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: Then Came the Ghosts
Wow, I really liked this one. (I don't know why but the first paragraph seemed to rhyme). The story had a meaning and lesson to it, and also a truth ...
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: More than just a teacher
I do agree, you need to work on your rhyming. But i liked it because the end was very funny. It was a good poem, but could do with a ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: I am free
wow, it was a smooth, descriptive, poem and was outside the usual style people chose for this topic. But I have to agree with kcglitter there, you couldn've have put ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Mirror Image
Wow, it was a beautiful story. The way it didn't give too much away as it improved was very good. I like your descriptive style of writing and the way ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Breaking Rules
Lovely, I liked the plot of this one. I'd Love to hear more of it ;)
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Empty Mind
Wow, you put something so complex into words and even made it rhym! I really liked it, well done :)
Apr 6, 2011 -
Re: My weird friend
heyy, thanks for the comments guys. I'll try and see what I can do to improve :)
Apr 5, 2011