CaseySaz

I ran through the trees, not knowing I could run so fast. Thoughts raced through my head. I think they were my thoughts even though I didn't know what they ...

This was short, but sweet. I thought the train of thought was spot-on, very realistic. It really get across the tone I think you're trying to accomplish. When some people ...

The idea behind your story interested me from the beginning. The concept of different universes is hard to wrap your mind around; it really makes you think. Here are my ...

The second thing I noticed about this piece is how realistic it sounds. From the little notes in the beginning to the dialogue with the barber, the flow of conversation ...

I enjoyed this. I think the idea has a lot of potential, and you did a good job of helping it reach that potential. I think that you could possibly ...

Hi there! This wasn't what I was expecting. As I was reading, I was thinking about complaining about Tommy being a little too Steven Urkel-esque. I thought I knew what ...

Review in red. [quote]We approached the stairs. On the grey walls words were written, cuss words, names, warnings. On the mainland, no one spoke of the island louder than a ...

Oooooooh, tension! I think its great. The raw emotion is unsettling and exciting. I want to know more about this story and what's going on in this dude's life. But ...

I like it. Your dialoge is really realistic. You really capture what it feels like to leave home for the first time. Just a few minor mistakes like "sentametal" is ...

It's cute. I like your style but it can get tiresome. I don't think you should use that style through out the whole story. Maybe you could just use it ...

I like it, its cute. Your writing is very detailed-maybe a little too detailed. It can get teadious to read when you put all those lond descriptions in. Try shortening ...

That was really great, I loved it. A few things kind of sound un-realistic though. I don't understand why his parents were hesitant to let he go to the park ...

I loved it. Your characters are very strong. I would recomend to cut a little of the joikng around between the two, it does little to advance the plot line. ...

I liked it, but I think that the mother is a bit extreme. Let her show her hatred in more discreet ways, like I don't know, selling her belongings on ...

I really liked it. I would like to know more about the man who is chasing her and why this is going on. Is this happening because she is exceptionaly ...