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  • Poetry » Politics, General Re: Different is okay.

    Hola! Coma estas? :) To be different is to be unnatural. Disgusting, impure. These are really good comparisons, and these are thought people actually have when they get made fun ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: The Truth about Love

    Hi there. I'm Change. Let's get rockin! The truth about love is crying your ass out This is phrased just a little oddly, I've never heard it put that way ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Dramatic Re: Memories

    Hi! reviewy reviewy time! right from the start I can already tell you have great characters developed, and not only that but a great relationship dynamic. The dialogue is really ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Dramatic Re: Ace and Det -- Prolog

    Review time!!! Yay! He began to run with the stampede of other animals. Other than the minor spelling error, I think this sentence would sound better if you just switch ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Empty

    Hey there! Change is here to change your life! Get it? heehee. Here I go ;) There I was, sitting on my battered old couch that hadn't been dry cleaned ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Savior

    Hey! It's review day! I'm going to review your work if that's okay? ;) after living in the black I agree about changing "black" to "dark". stung and watered While ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: A Cinquain, a Lanturne, and a Pantoum...

    Hola! I am here to review the glorious work you have put forth! ;) Shadow, a silent death-- slowly squeezes life from joy and laughter. Pain is left, in darkness ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Butterfly Sickness

    Hey! Change here! It's great you got so many reviews but here's another! To start off, I can already tell with the title that this idea is completely original and ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: redwoods

    Change here! Ready for some poetry. Even though it's so short, I like the poem. There should be capitalization in the title but that's just a minor detail that bugged ...

    Aug 24, 2013
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: Fast, Binge

    Hey Cheddar! Here as promised even though you didn't ask! I like the parallelism exhibited in the first two paragraphs. It's very clever and a good opener to show that ...

    Aug 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Sonnet!

    "What is a choir, but groups of lips that sing?" "What, then, is a wedding, than a mere crowd" "For what well-wishers doth wish to last well?" "Thus, with simple ...

    Aug 23, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Perfectly Imperfect: Chapter One

    I gotta prepare because I'm going to edit while I read. Breath Breath Okay now I can do it! You ready? "anticipation piling more on me" I feel like this ...

    Aug 23, 2013
  • Poetry » Literature, Spiritual Re: Purple Lava Lamp

    First off, I love anything from a child's point of view because it's just so different and interesting. These kinds of works always give such a different feel and children ...

    Aug 22, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The True Monsters

    I love the title to start. It makes you think. And I love how you use two analogies right away. It could potentially be difficult to use monsters and puppets ...

    Aug 22, 2013
  • Other » General, General Re: To them

    Piles of material stare at me with a judging exterior This line is clever, I like the personification because it really fits the tone I think you're trying to portraying. ...

    Aug 22, 2013


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