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  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: Nothingleftnothingleftnothingleft

    I love this poem, mainly because it really corresponds with high school, at least my high school career to date. I really lied the imagery you created, and the little ...

    Oct 28, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Autumn Winds

    Not too deep, not too shallow. I like it. My favorite season happens to be autumn, so I may be a little prejudiced there. Even though it wasn't to long, ...

    Oct 28, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: My Willow Tree

    Like sincerelymayhem, I really enjoy the rhyme scheme. I can totally relate, except my secret place is the roof of my house. It's nice to get away and be alone ...

    Mar 31, 2015
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: For sale, one lifetime, poor condition.

    Wow. What go me the most is that I can totally imagine this being a part of everyday life in the future. While I was reading I was reminded of ...

    Mar 31, 2015
  • Other » Other, General Re: Zack

    Heart-warming was the first thing to pop into my head. I'm not even going to review your grammar because it's so spot-on correct, and so was the writing in general. ...

    Feb 17, 2015
  • Poetry » Horror, Realistic Re: Until you die

    I enjoy this piece because it's easy to relate to, plain and simple. I used to be depressed and I did cut. Before I get too deep, here's a fun ...

    Feb 17, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: One Wish

    I think that this is a truly wonderful piece, and I really love the message, but there is room for a bit of improvement. First of all, I'm pretty sure ...

    Feb 17, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Cliches and Kisses

    Like the few before me, I couldn't really understand it, but that doesn't make it any less emotional. I feel like it's just a small story of lovers? Even if ...

    Feb 16, 2015
  • Short Story » Narrative, Realistic Re: no more white women, i'm done (18+)

    Like angelwing12, I was hooked right from "I hate her". I don't know why, but I think it's because I needed to find out who she was and what the ...

    Feb 12, 2015
  • Article / Essay » Culture, Health Re: Abortion

    Okay. Well, not sure where to start. First thing though, you made your arguments in a very rude and offensive way, justifying them with God. Not saying this is wrong, ...

    Jan 29, 2015
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, Culture Re: Blank Draft

    Wow. This is really deep and thought-provoking. I didn't see any grammar mistakes, and, from the first sentence, I was completely drawn into the paper. I've thought about this kind ...

    Jan 13, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: When You Least Expect It

    This is a pretty great story. I like how you were able to, not to be racist, convey the ghetto slang into the story. It's pretty nicely written, and it's ...

    Jan 8, 2015
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Yewis and the Terrible Word Eater (Pt. 1)

    One of my favorite parts in this fanfic was the "forbidden act" given to the Word-Eater: He can't eat names. That kind of thing has always been something that I ...

    Jan 8, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Spiritual Re: What You Do Not See

    I honestly think this describes me as a smaller kid. I was bullied quite a bit, mostly from a kid who I had to sleep in the same room with, ...

    Jan 8, 2015
  • Poetry » Horror, Romantic Re: A Not-So-True Story of a Man Called Earl Higgins

    Sorry that the last one was blank, something happened with the message. Anyway, I honestly love this poem. It's not easy to convey a plot twist ending in so few ...

    Jan 8, 2015


The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.
— Richard Price