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My eyes are wet and I nearly cried! Poor Liz! And that bloody bastard MUN. Shame!! But it's so sad because I really liked Alex's character but then he did ...

What?!?!!? That bastard!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! He better have been forced for that shit, otherwise he's an honourary asshole!!!!!!!!!! :O:O:O I'm so glad I came to this post this morning! Thanks for shocking ...

With a little editing, this will be a masterpiece. And you know what? I admit, I'm growing fond of the story and the reactions and the gestures that I once ...

Hi, I like this story, just look over it and edit spelling n' grammer n' whatnot. To be honset, I agree with KJ about the dialogue and reactions, though don't ...

That was pretty good, I thought it were two people watching a movie with these two characters, but it turned out these WERE the two people! In a good way ...

Whoa. That is deep and powerful! I liked the descriptions...the emotive descriptions! I also liked the amount of the boy's emotion you had included in the extract, also how fast-paced ...

Hey, most of the errors have been pointed out, so I will not go over them when you've seen them already. Sounds logical, doesn't it? :P Okay, well I really ...

I like the title, actually: it's what got me attracted to read it! :D I like the detail in the girl's thoughts, because you already get to know her well. ...

Hey, this is great! Accurate and dramatic but in an understated way: the only reason why it is dramatic is the situation itself! But the way you have written it ...

My check might, though. Cheque, not check. Um that and you mean "grimacing?" Anyway, I like the story so far and would love to hear more, because I'm questioning it ...

I liked the idea and the story, and the errors n' whatnothave been pointed out. Hmmm, I think that it could have been written better, like less confusing and more ...

This is different, and that's really cool. I can sort of relate to this, so yeah! Wickid ones. I'm gonna read the second chapter now, if there is one, but ...

Yes, there are quite a few grammatical and spelling errors that have been pointed out already. I like the part when she's jumping on the trampoline and contemplating. I liked ...

I see that height is important in your story. Is that trying to show the power difference between characters? And eyes too: they're mentioned a lot, so is eye contact ...

I absolutely loved this! It's a great story so far, the characters are both cute, the setting was described very well indeed. I like how you didn't include names at ...