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  • Poetry » Lyrical, Narrative Re: Shadow

    Hey, This is a really interesting poem. First off nice job with punctuation. As for little nitpicks, in your line "You stare, when I ain't looking" I feel like ain't ...

    Nov 6, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    Hey, This is an amazing poem. You've done a reallynice job capturing this whole perfect image about the perfect girl. But you also showed its darker side and the strain ...

    Nov 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Spiritual Re: Do right and wrong really exist?

    Hey, I get where your going here...I think. I'm a little confused as to how exactly this is a poem tho. It doesn't meet my criteria for a poem. Looking ...

    Nov 5, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Our Tree

    Hey, This is a really interesting poem. I love that you took the time to use proper punctuation. Thank you so much for that. I loved the words you choose ...

    Nov 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Horror Re: hopeless

    Hey, So right of the bat I can see this is a really short poem. I feel like you just kinda threw words onto the page however. You used no ...

    Nov 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Desire

    Hey, This is a interesting short poem to say the very least. I see a few errors however, for example "the memories Of lost" of does not need to be ...

    Nov 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: Let's Get Lost

    Hey, This is a really great poem for not being very long it has a lot of depth. The translation went over very smoothly, so nice job there. The use ...

    Nov 4, 2014
  • Short Story » Satire, Action / Adventure Re: I'm Serious...

    Hey, I admit when I saw you said two stories I was mildly frightened... so I have to agree with the others for being a short story this is awfully ...

    Nov 4, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Change The Direction of The Air

    Hey, I'd like to start by saying I love the use of the picture at the end. It was a nice change from the usual ending and the fact that ...

    Nov 4, 2014
  • Poetry » Narrative, Other Re: OMIT

    Hey, I like this poem. I Wish it was longer however I really enjoyed reading this. I find that I can really relate to it to and that's important for ...

    Nov 4, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: An Average Daybreak

    Hey, Amazing poem! However I'm not entirely sure how the last part fits in I might just not be comprehending something however. Also how exactly did you go from guitar ...

    Nov 4, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Fantasy Re: Rap of the River: Humanities end

    Hey, This poem is great. I have to admit at first I was a little confused by the capitalization. At this point however I think I understand, but I'm not ...

    Nov 4, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Poem of the Oneiroi

    Hey, I wanna start by saying you don't have to point out the typo at the bottom you can just go in and fix it. Otherwise this is a great ...

    Nov 3, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: [queen of spades]

    Hey, This has the potential to become a great poem. Its a little rough right now however. I feel like this poem reads a bit like a choppy ocean its ...

    Nov 3, 2014
  • Poetry » General, Realistic Re: Mirror Image?

    Hey, This is a interesting poem. It was written very well so good job there. Thank you so much for using punctuation! A lot of poets don't feel the need ...

    Nov 3, 2014


"The trouble with Borrowing another mind was, you always felt out of place when you got back to your own body, and Granny was the first person ever to read the mind of a building. Now she was feeling big and gritty and full of passages. 'Are you all right?' Granny nodded, and opened her windows. She extended her east and west wings and tried to concentrate on the tiny cup held in her pillars."
— Terry Pratchett, Discworld: Equal Rites