Corncob

thank you! the commas thing has been previously suggested, but im just too lazy to change that right now. ;D. Thanks for the review!

Excellent and original! Keep writing!

thank you, actually helped a lot! Yeah, I guess i had a brainfart, because I was like WHAT RHYMES WITH SITE AAAH when there are like a million yeah gonna ...

AAAAH WRITE MORE!!!

Wow. I bet I could give tons of criticism, but I don't want to even write a review. just keep writing. Such a good story! I'm addicted!

Good, bad, so, sad, what? IMMA CONFUSED LOL

I think you just described how every teenager feels. Good job. Poetry at its prime. LOVED IT!!!

Thank you for the thoughtful review, if you have something better to suggest for rhyming with opportunity, I'm all ears, because that was a hard one! :)

Thanks about the heart thing, I noticed that when I was writing it, but I was about to eat breakfast and it was my first poem and i was like ...

Thank you for the kind review!!!! Hey, got to keep "I know this poem isn't the best" because it rhymes with obsessed (sort of), right? ;D Thank you so much! ...

thank you for the great review! I really appreciate it! If you could point out which lines didn't rhyme, because I looked through, and didn't find any that completely didn't ...

thanks for answering my question, as I saw those periods on other poems as well and was confused. No problem, you are such a good writer!

RIIIIIGHT thanks :)

every one of your poems is deep and awesome, so I just have one questions: Why a green sweater? Why not blue or red or whatever?

i actually think the non capitalization of the first lines makes it more effective