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Re: The mourning Moon.
I just got done reviewing a poem saying that it needed more punctuation, but I feel this poem needs less of it. The reason for her anguish, the cross that ...
Nov 29, 2008 -
Re: Wars
I'd suggest adding more imagery to this. You mention the violence, but what is going on? Why exactly are the families grieving? Be specific. Families grieve for many reasons, ranging ...
Nov 29, 2008 -
Re: One Cut
One thing that I'm not a fan of in poetry is going in and out from rhyming to free-verse. I can appreciate both, but when the author fluctuates between one ...
Nov 29, 2008 -
Re: Wich one do you like better.
The word "because" really gets to me in the first one. It seems to mess up the rhythm set up by the first sentence. As for the second one, which ...
Nov 29, 2008